Firstly reduce the word count to 25, to ensure this is effectively connecting to your audience, rather than making them read a lot. However the content you have included clearly shows the music genre you are wishing to use for your magazine, and introducing the fashion is a great way of connecting with the audience. You could however improve it if you used polysyllabic lexis with strong meaning, I would pay around £3 for this magazine from this pitch, because I'm not aware of what your article will include, which makes me want to read it.
It is clear, from the pitch, what music genre you want to use. To improve, I think you should use better language for the 25 words. I would pay £3.50 for your magazine as it gives curiosity to the audience, which makes them want to purchase it.
I like the idea and it very clear on who the audience, what they are interested in/like and what age range it is for and I also would slightly know what would consist of your magazine. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I would include what kind of bands and artist would be included and their genre and also what type of language you would be using.
I like your idea and you have made it very clear who your target market is. I like your colour pallet choice and using fashion as a way to target your audience as it will be an effective way to gain an audience. I would consider paying £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I would suggest including fashion in more detail to help gain a bigger audiences.
Reducing the word count to 25 words will allowed you to connect with the audience more effectively. The 25 words need to be more accurate and well chosen to relate to your audience. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine.
I like how you have presented your work, to improve you could alter the timings of the slides so the person viewing isn't waiting around for things to appear and change, you also need to reduce it to 25 words. i would pay £3.00 for your magazine.
I enjoyed your pitch and also like the idea. In my opinion, you have made it extremely clear who the target audience is. I also like the way that you have included you choice of colour palettes and fashion, this also makes it clear who your target audience is. To improve, reduce your word count to the maximum 25 to make the pitch short and snappier. I would be willing to pay between £2.50 and £3.00 for your magazine.
Firstly reduce the word count to 25, to ensure this is effectively connecting to your audience, rather than making them read a lot. However the content you have included clearly shows the music genre you are wishing to use for your magazine, and introducing the fashion is a great way of connecting with the audience. You could however improve it if you used polysyllabic lexis with strong meaning, I would pay around £3 for this magazine from this pitch, because I'm not aware of what your article will include, which makes me want to read it.
ReplyDeleteIt is clear, from the pitch, what music genre you want to use. To improve, I think you should use better language for the 25 words. I would pay £3.50 for your magazine as it gives curiosity to the audience, which makes them want to purchase it.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea and it very clear on who the audience, what they are interested in/like and what age range it is for and I also would slightly know what would consist of your magazine. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I would include what kind of bands and artist would be included and their genre and also what type of language you would be using.
ReplyDeleteI like your idea and you have made it very clear who your target market is. I like your colour pallet choice and using fashion as a way to target your audience as it will be an effective way to gain an audience. I would consider paying £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I would suggest including fashion in more detail to help gain a bigger audiences.
ReplyDeleteReducing the word count to 25 words will allowed you to connect with the audience more effectively. The 25 words need to be more accurate and well chosen to relate to your audience.
ReplyDeleteI would pay £3.00 for your magazine.
I like how you have presented your work, to improve you could alter the timings of the slides so the person viewing isn't waiting around for things to appear and change, you also need to reduce it to 25 words. i would pay £3.00 for your magazine.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your pitch and also like the idea. In my opinion, you have made it extremely clear who the target audience is. I also like the way that you have included you choice of colour palettes and fashion, this also makes it clear who your target audience is. To improve, reduce your word count to the maximum 25 to make the pitch short and snappier. I would be willing to pay between £2.50 and £3.00 for your magazine.
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